Post #4
I'm excited to begin the revision process and start adding more content to this essay because it's been a very messy process thus far. When I write, I tend to overexplain things and make my sentences longer than they need to be, so I'm going to try and clean that up first and foremost. I need to expand on each of my sources a bit more as well, but the reason I didn't do that is because I fall into the trap of overexplaining there as well. Sometimes I just write, and write, and write, and it gets out of control because I just have to say exactly what I want to say in the exact way I want to say it. I'm very picky in that regard. What I have written is a very, very, very rough draft, and my work usually improves as I go through more and more rounds of editing. I think it's going to take a few attempts to make this as clean as possible, but we'll just have to see where this goes.